Feeling quite productive today! I’ve added another 2,500 words and finished chapter 7. The words seemed to just flow today! I’m well into chapter 8 and I feel like I’m getting into the exciting part of the story! Definitely motivated to continue, but I ran out of time.
Elithius: Book One: The Red Captain
This book was on my WordPress TBR list.
John lives in the Golden Lands, where night time is replaced with just sunsets and light and peace cover the land. Abandoned by his parents, John was left to raise his younger siblings. Life could hardly get any worse, until a group of Evil attack his house, kidnap his siblings and left him to die.
When John recovers, he knows he has to go after the Evil. He wants revenge for what they have done and he needs to find his siblings. He travels through the Golden Lands, searching for the Evil and making friends and enemies along the way. However, there is one particular type of evil that stands in his way, and John doesn’t even realise.
This book is written with an anime focus, which I don’t really know anything about. There were a lot of things that happened that I found unusual, unrealistic or confusing but the small knowledge I do have about anime makes me think that the book does follow that style. Please keep this in mind as you read my review. Someone who enjoys anime would probably have more appreciation for the story.
I had a lot of difficulty trying to find an emotional connection with John. He seemed so distant to me, even though the book was written in first person. His character felt lacking and I was not really enjoying the book. Then chapter fifteen happened and everything changed. I finally understood why John had been the way he was and everything started making sense. However, chapter fifteen is one third of the way through the book, and that is a long time to go before gaining an understanding of the main character.
I liked Faith’s character. Her commitment to John’s cause seemed a little sudden and I did not feel as though her decision to travel with him was very realistic. That being said, Faith was a more realistic character for the rest of the book and I liked her hesitations and internal conflicts.
I found the Evil confusing. I could not really gain a proper image of them in my mind and I would have liked a deeper description. They also seemed very stereotypical for a ‘bad guy’ that is just evil in every way, but I think that might be an anime theme.
I liked the way the story progressed, starting smaller and then getting bigger. The characters were given opportunities to evolve and learn from past mistakes.
There was a lot of fighting, especially in the beginning chapters when I was not enjoying it as much. Sometimes it seemed like the fighting was unnecessary and out of place, but it made more sense later in the book.
I did not find it very realistic when the actions of the Evil were explained during fights. While I understand that someone might want to boast, it seemed to happen a bit too much and I think there could have been other ways to explain the advancing plot.
The concept of a continuous day was really interesting. I have not read a book that has done that before. I think a little more description focusing on this would have made the world even better because I was left wondering how different the lives of the people in the Golden Lands were compared to places that experience a real night time. I would have liked to know if the plants grew differently and if the people tried to make the rooms darker to sleep or were they just used to so much light.
Special words were made for men and women but, to be honest, I cannot even remember what they were. It was a good idea to come up with different titles but they were not used after being explained. The titles were given the descriptions of ‘knights’ and ‘beloved’ and then the words ‘knights’ and ‘beloved’ were used after that. I am not sure if this was done to remind people of the descriptions but I think the reader should have just been trusted to remember what the titles meant.
You should all know by now that I do not give spoilers away in book reviews so the following comment won’t make much sense to those who have not read the book: I loved the concept of gados. Very well done.
Grammar and Writing
Most of the book was very well written. There were a few confusing sentences that might have been better with different wording, but this was the author’s first published book.
There were certain words that seemed to be repeated a lot. Characters ‘grunted’ very regularly and I found that noticing these repetitions often stopped the flow of the book. That being said, there were other times when the repetition was a fantastic idea. Since this book is written in first person, it really made it easy to get lost in the thought process of the characters. The repetition used when they were confused or trying to process something was very clever.
There are a lot of protagonist switches. Sometimes the point of view changed only for a few paragraphs. I found that this also lost some of the flow for the story and they were not all necessary. Some of the switches could have been removed and replaced with the current protagonist noticing something about another character.
I did not understand the point of having character sheets. They were only available for some of the protagonists, the main ones, which meant a character was going to be important if they got one. I found this to be a spoiler for later in the story. The information on the sheets was not vital and could easily be explained with descriptions when introducing the character.
Also, I am not sure if this really belongs under this heading but I was not sure where else to put it. The cover and title of the book are a bit confusing. The title from Goodreads makes it look like the book is actually called The Red Captain and the series is Elithius but the cover does not say The Red Captain at all.
I found it really hard to get into this book to begin with. I probably only persisted with it because it was on my WordPress TBR list. However, once I got to chapter fifteen I was glad for that persistence. The book really changed and I suddenly felt involved and interested. After reading the book, I understand why it started the way it did, but it still needs to be done in a way that makes the reader want to continue.
My lack of understanding for anime probably hindered my reading for the first third of the book, but I found myself no longer worrying about that afterwards.
Now that I feel more involved, I definitely want to read book 2 whenever it comes out.
So I got such a good response from my old poems that I decided to try and write some more! I really appreciate all the comments and I can’t believe how much people enjoyed them! Let me know how you think the new ones compare!
I will try to put up one a week but it also depends on whether or not I have had the chance to write one.. As always, they focus on the things that influence my life, and at the moment there is one specific thing that really gives me inspiration! If you don’t already know, you’ll find out what it is below 🙂
The Good Things in Life
Think about your life,
Just take a little while.
Think about the good times,
And the things that make you smile.
Think about the times you’ve laughed,
The memories that you’ve shared.
Think about the friendships and
All the people who have cared.
Think about your favourite songs,
That make you tap your feet.
Think about your favourite tastes,
And what you like to eat.
Think about a thrilling book,
And relaxing in the sun.
Think about everything that
You’ve ever considered fun.
Take these things and add them up,
Total them combined.
As amazing as they are,
There is one thing that you’ll find.
No matter how happy you are,
Or the way they make you bright.
Nothing beats your baby’s laugh,
It is the best delight.
I haven’t had a lot of time to write today. I spent the morning doing the short story prompt response and catching up on all the things on my reader.
This afternoon, my daughter decided to have yet another one of her half hour naps (no more 2 hour ones like she did for a few days..) so I spent some time editing the scene I wrote last time. I wasn’t happy with where it left the characters. After cutting a bunch of paragraphs and then adding in others, I only increased my word count by 300 words before my daughter woke up.. oh well, it’s something at least. And I’m happier with where it is at.
I’ll be taking a break from writing for a few days because I’m going down to the river and I’m not taking a computer with me 😛 but it will give me a chance to catch up on some reading! Hopefully I’ll have some reviews to post when I get back.
On a side note, I’ve recently created a Twitter account and I’m still figuring out what to do with it. I’d love to follow other WordPress authors so either drop your Twitter name in the comments below or you can follow me @Kim_Missen
It was a cool morning during early spring. The wind was gentle and there were birds singing in the trees. The sky was grey and threatened to rain but that did not stop curious and playful minds. Three children stood at the bottom of a tower, staring up at the highest window.
“What do you think is up there?” Thomas asked. He was the eldest, a boy of twelve years. His short brown hair had not been combed that morning and it stuck out in all directions. He wore a plain, tan shirt with buttons down the front and black shorts.
“I don’t know,” replied Mary. She was eleven and had long brown hair that was braided down her back. Her pale green dress stopped just below the knees, but the sleeves were long to protect her from the chill.
“Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your hair!” Gemma yelled loudly. She was the baby of the group, only eight years old. Her dark blonde hair was tied into high pig tails and she wore a simple, purple dress. The older children laughter at her, causing Gemma to stamp her foot with frustration.
“It might have worked!” She insisted.
The three children continued to stare at the window, letting their imaginations run wild. There were all kinds of possibilities.
“You know, there is only one way we are going to find out what is up there,” Thomas finally said.
The three children looked at each other, knowing what Thomas was thinking but unsure if they were prepared to voice it. There was something very intimidating about the unknown.
“Oh, come on! Don’t tell me you’re scared?!” Thomas said.
Mary sighed. She could tell that he was nervous too, but curiosity was starting to get the better of her.
“Alright, let’s go,” she finally agreed.
Gemma gave an excited bounce and then the three children made their way to the door. They paused before it, no one reaching out for the handle. There was yet another moment of silence before Thomas gave in. He turned the handle and the door opened with a loud creak. Dust fell from the door frame and there were several spider webs scattered around.
Thomas picked up a stick from the ground and waved it in front of him. He cleared a path for the children to enter and then the door suddenly closed behind them. Gemma screamed. Mary almost screamed as well, but she held it back. The room was dark, but the cracks in the stone walls let in just enough light to see the stairs.
“We’re already here, we might as well keep going,” Thomas said, though there was hesitation in his voice.
Thomas led the way up the stairs and the girls followed quietly behind him. No one wanted to be left behind. The climb seemed to take hours, as they went up step after step. In reality, it was only about ten minutes but the fear creeping into their minds took away all concepts of time.
Finally, they reached a door. Hesitating once more, Thomas reached for the handle and opened it with a similarly loud creak. The children stepped inside the room and gasped. Before them was a world of unlimited imagination. It was one of adventure, love and magic. They stood in a room that was filled with thousands of books.
I’ll be honest, this time I was actually hunting down new fantasy authors to follow on WordPress (because you can never have enough!) and I came across this post about updates and upcoming releases. It was thanking people for their support with the release of Fire and talking about Book 2, Earth.
I have not even read the synopsis of this book, but just look at that cover! It is simple, and yet very detailed. I love how the ball is slightly transparent and and it really does seem to capture the element. I could not move on without adding this book to my TBR!
I don’t always read what books are about. If they are recommended to me by someone I know I tend to take their word for it and keep everything as a surprise. The title of the book and series has already sparked my interest and I can be fairly confident that this is a book for me.
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I came across this book while browsing my reader. To be honest, I don’t read everything that is on there, I just don’t have enough time for that. But the author wrote an update post, and I always stop to read those.
One of the first things that really caught my eye in this post was the search for book reviewers for Book 2 by the end of the year. This is definitely something I have been interested in lately. (You may have seen my new review style and I loved the feedback I received.)
But, of course, you cannot read Book 2 without reading Book 1! I looked it up via the link in the update post and the synopsis sounds quite interesting! So here it is, on my WordPress TBR 🙂
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So I put my daughter down for her nap and thought… I don’t really feel like writing. And then I remembered all those times I’ve been told “write anyway!” and “you can’t just wait until you are in the mood to write!” So I opened up my latest chapter and read the notes I left at the bottom. I decided that maybe I could add a little more.
And then a little more..
And the next thing I know, my daughter has decided to have a 2 HOUR NAP! (which she also did yesterday but otherwise hasn’t done in AGES and has only done a few times in her life!)
2,718 words later, she finally decided to wake up. Definitely glad I decided to attempt to write “a little more”!
Luckily the forming shadows,
Started to fade away.
My light was given back to me,
As the night turned into day.
The tears now see forever gone,
And my happiness returned.
The fire went out easily,
Before anything was burned.
Now I sit back down and wonder,
All my thoughts collide.
Kind words are sticking in my head,
“Always look on the bright side.”
And that’s the last poem written in my book! I would have been sixteen years old by the end. I am sure I have more somewhere else. There are silly ones somewhere too, but I will have to rummage around and find them!